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People should follow the customs and traditions when people start to live in a new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The world is seeing a rise in migrants who move from their own countries to live in another. Many people are of the opinion that migrants should adapt and
follow but
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follow, but
customs
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the customs
 and traditions of the destination nation. I can only partly agree with
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 view and will give my reasons below. In terms of customs, each
country
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 has its own politics, laws and norms that define its structure and community.
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, committing to be a member of one society without committing to its regulations or even trying to change them is not appropriate and
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 person should not decide to live in
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country
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 the
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 place.
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, following the customs
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 helps migrants themselves and the
country
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 maintain and secure social welfare and national protection.
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, I believe
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 is an obligation that every person living in a new
country
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 should abide with no questions asked. Traditions, from everyday practice
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in
of
 religious identification, vary from community to
community but
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community, but
 they help each person define his or her own identity and values,
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 should be socially embraced and respected regardless of the differences between countries. It is our human rights to freely practice our own culture and traditions everywhere we go,
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 apart from following the mandatory national customs, I believe it is not compulsory to eschew our own values to adapt another when we change our living environment. A salad bowl is healthier than a melting pot. In conclusion, I agree that people who live in a new
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 should abide automatically to the customs but only optionally to new traditions.
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