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Some people think that it is better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Other people believe that it's good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Friendship
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 is the relation that contributes to the wellness and stressless life and a good friend always stands tall irrespective of any circumstances. It is always debatable
that
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 we should establish
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friendship
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friendships
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 with
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people
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 of a similar mentality
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, few
people
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 reckon that it is essential to build ties with
people
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 of different opinions. I believe a friend with similar agreements creates a strong
relationship
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. On the one hand, it is discussed that we should elect and strengthen our
friendship
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 bonds with
people
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 of similar standpoints and I believe
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 will certainly lead to a healthy
relationship
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. We meet
friends
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 to discuss the stress of our
day to day
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 life and a person with an identical thought process will assist in the decision-making of any of the harsh issues of professional and personal life. A similar mentality makes the
friendship
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 rock solid and may eventually help us in overcoming the burdens.
On the other hand
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,
friends
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 with different opinions may lead to a sour
relationship
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. We as a human often
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let
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 the companies who have unidentical opinions and opposite mentalities. It is better to differ on some issues as it may lead to
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new learning and guidance,
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, frequent disagreements shall lead to a devastating
relationship
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.
For example
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last
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 month, I was
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 a discussion with one of my
friends
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 regarding a social issue and it turned into a heated argument leading us to avoid each other. It is arduous to stay in a zone where we aren't comfortable.
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 anxiety, we may
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 from looking at things that can help us
in overcoming
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the
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challenges and a friend can assist us in showing
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us the
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 right path.
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,
friends
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 with
a
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apply
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similar
opinion
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opinions
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 will assist in evolving us a better
person
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people
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.
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, different standpoints may often lead to
a negative arguments
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negative arguments
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 and may have a vulnerable impact on the relationships.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bond
  • support
  • unconditional love
  • shared values
  • mutual understanding
  • trust
  • emotional well-being
  • interdependence
  • societal norms
  • companionship
  • loyalty
  • advice
  • experiences
  • mentorship
  • trustworthy
  • reliable
  • reliable
  • cherish
  • strengthen
  • deepen
  • attach importance to
  • prioritize
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