Some people argue that arts, such as paintings and music, are a waste of money and the government should spend this money on other public services. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Nowadays
people
are concerned about
the Change preposition
that
government
was
wasting Wrong verb form
is
money
on arts
and they Correct article usage
the arts
are thinking
that Wrong verb form
think
this
money
should have invested
in Add a missing verb
been invested
peoples'
welfare. In my opinion, I completely agree with the above statement that the Change noun form
people's
government
is wasting money
on paintings and music
. However
, at the same time, others think that government
will allocate funds to the arts
. This
essay will discuss how the government
is wasting money
on the arts
.
Firstly
, it is likely most of the citizens feel that the government
spending too much of
Change preposition
apply
money
on cultural activities, such
as paintings, music
but the Correct word choice
and music
government
primary job is to provide common services, Change noun form
government's
such
as food, houses, transport, sport
facilities, parks, Change the noun form
sports
community
halls. Correct word choice
and community
For example
, in
some countries Change preposition
apply
they
are not economically better still they are spending huge Correct pronoun usage
apply
amount
of Fix the agreement mistake
amounts
money
on conducting an
international Correct article usage
apply
event
like the football Fix the agreement mistake
events
world cup
and hosting Olympic events etc. Correct your spelling
World Cup
This
type of unnecessary spending will impact the countries' economic growth. So that is
the reason, people
thinking
that the Wrong verb form
think
government
wasting public resources.
On the other hand
, some people
advised that spending money
on the arts
, such
as painting and music
will give individuals to show their talent on a global platform. Which eventually increase
Correct subject-verb agreement
increases
country's
popularity Correct article usage
the country's
on
Change preposition
apply
world wide
. Correct your spelling
worldwide
In addition
, the country got recognition all over the world. And people
also
not getting
bored doing the same kind of work every day. If the Wrong verb form
get
government
train people
on
Change preposition
in
the
painting and Correct article usage
apply
conducting
free Wrong verb form
conducts
music
classes, the people
will come to this class
will learn the art of Fix the agreement mistake
these classes
music
. So that is
the reason, some people
disagree with that
the Correct word choice
apply
government
wasting money
on cultural activities.
In conclusion, it is likely most people
agree that the government
spending huge money
on cultural events. In my opinion, I completely agree with the government
wasting money
on the arts
. Still, some people
believe that the government
giving inspiration to the people
to learn the arts
.Submitted by shirish on
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