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There have been some problems with the bus service, especially its reliability, in your area over the last two weeks. Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In your letter • describe what the problems are • explain how these problems are affecting you • suggest what you would like the company to do

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Dear Manager, I would like to let you know,
since
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couple
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 of weeks, the
bus
 services are not properly running in a rout 34. Even, everything was fine till new construction started in the area, most of the time buses are delayed and
effecting
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 the regular commuters. Let me explain the problem, due to new railway line construction,
bus
 frequencies have been reduced, especially 8:30 AM schedule
bus
; Even though evening hours buses are
also
. Unfortunately, I am not able to reach
office
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 on time
,
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 and
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may be
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 other passengers face the same problem. Could you please restart
morning
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 timing
bus
? Even, I would be happy if the service will start 10 to 15 minutes early or later, but not after 9:00 AM. If you needed some special recommendation from area supervisor, I am happy to approach him, but make the request in fast mode. Thank you very much for considering. Your Faithfully, Vinod Rajput
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