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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is a fact that students spend a lot of
time
 learning. While some believe that the
time
 spent on practical
knowledge
 is enough, others argue that too much of the students'
time
 is spent on gaining theoretical
knowledge
. I agree with the latter view and in
this
 essay, I will support my opinion with examples.  
First
 and foremost, not everything
that is
 taught to students has practical benefits in their life. Some subjects are less likely to be used in day to day life.
For example
, we are not going to use the
knowledge
 that we gained reading history every day.
Instead
 of adding more hours in the curriculum for these subjects, it can be replaced by subjects that has more practical usage like plumbing, carpentry, etc.
As a result
, students could use their skills to fix everyday problems.  
Also
, even when there are practical lessons, enough
time
 is not spent on them. Due to
this
, learners struggle to translate what they learnt in their theory into practical purposes.
For Instance
, more hours are spent for physics in classrooms than in the laboratories. If equal weighting is given to theory and practical syllabuses, students will have a better idea on how to translate the theory into practice.   To recapitulate, because of reasons like students put too much
time
 on subjects that has no practical purpose and even when there are practical classes, students are not spending enough
time
 on it, I agree with people who believes that too much of the students'
time
 is spent on gaining theoretical
knowledge
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rote memorization
  • practical skills
  • adaptable skills
  • critical thinking
  • balanced approach
  • problem-solving
  • decision-making
  • workforce readiness
  • real-life challenges
  • technological advancements
  • information management
  • creativity hindrance
  • lifelong learning
  • skill development
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