Some groups, such as poor people and people from rural areas, think universities should make it especially easy for them to get access to university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Going to university seems like an inevitable process for every
youngsters
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youngster
,
however
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, more and more people are concerned about the method how every youngster
get
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gets
the permission to the universities equally. Whether students from poor families and remote areas should receive privileges to go to universities is still a controversial issue. I personally do not agree some groups of students should have any privilege to access to universities.
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of all, allowing poor or remote students to access to universities easily can be unfair to others who has been working really hard all through the his/her studying life.
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is because arduous students may not able to receive appropriate rewards, needless to say, it is likely for some rich and advanced students to take
advantages
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advantage
of
this
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policy to gain the access to the university without spending enough effort.
This
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kind of assessment system would only
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benefit
to a small amount of people.
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, election system like
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may not be beneficial to select qualified employees for the future society. The exclusion of true hard-working and intelligent people would lead to the decline of social productivity, which, in the long term, might be harmful to the economy. Since some of the students may gain the permission to the universities easily, compared to those who truly spend considerable effort
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to
study, they might lack of enough academic knowledge in certain subject.
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, those students may disable to meet the requirement of some occupation in the society,
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, reducing the
deriving
having the power of driving or impelling
driving
force of the development. People who
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a sheltered port where ships can take on or discharge cargo
harbour
the view that
impoverished youngster
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impoverished youngsters
should be given the privilege to go to the universities due to the imbalance of education resources,
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as qualified teachers and comfortable environment.
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Both
problems have been solved due to the proliferation of
internet
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the internet
, and the gap between the rich and the poor has been largely reduced. In sum, it is not advisable to allow some groups of students go to universities easily, students who truly spend considerate effort can not be treated fairly. What’s more, it could lead to the inappropriate selection
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of
qualified employees, which can lead to harmful to social driving force.
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