As countries develop, more and more people buy and use their own cars. Do the advantages of this trend for individuals outweigh the disadvantages for the environment?

the
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The
graph here represents the increase in the population's age in japan, Sweden and the USA. It indicates that the percentage of elderly people in the three countries increased by about 20%
until
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to
2020. The expectations that it will increase again to be around 25% in 2020. In 1940, the proportion of people aged 65 and over was the least in the three countries. In Japan was only 5
%
and it was approximately 7% and 9% in Sweden and the USA respectively. In nearly 1990, both Sweden and the USA increased to roughly 15%.
whilst
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Whilst
, Japan reduced to only 2.5%.
However
, the USA proportion remained constant
from
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for
nearly 1990 till 2020.
conclusively
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Conclusively
, we found that the percentage of elderly people
has promoted
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have promoted
dramatically and
it
it is
it's
supposed to continue rising in the
next
two decades 2030 and 2040.
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  • personal mobility
  • convenience
  • commuting
  • quality of life
  • personalized space
  • carbon emissions
  • global warming
  • air pollution
  • traffic congestion
  • environmental degradation
  • resource depletion
  • electric vehicles
  • carpooling
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