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Do you think extra-curricular activities are important in a student’s life?” Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, students have too much school homework that reduces their time for
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, practicing and kind of sport for students would make them healthier and fit,
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 camping and outdoor activities like visiting museums are beneficial to pupils as they get a chance to know more about various things
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n student go to a camp , they learn more how to do different things and be more independent In conclusion , i opine that extra curricular are very important and should be more activities in schools to develop the skills of students
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