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Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Knowledge is an important part of the modern world.
the
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The
 importance of knowledge has been increasing in recent years.
some
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Some
 people believe that there is no
value
 of knowing the past to live in the present and some of them defend that it is an important fact to know the past and I agree with the
value
 of the past because I believe that people can understand the
value
 of present by looking at the past.
Also people
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Also, people
 can predict the present by looking at
past
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the past
.
Firstly
, past time is a really good tool to predict and say something about the future because the present is the reflection of the past.
For example
, if somebody
create
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creates
 a business in a new field that he or she has never established
any thing
an indefinite thing
anything
 before, they can easily check the past market data to predict to present and future. And
that is
 one of the major
tool
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tools
 when somebody or firms go into a new field.
Secondly
, past is a very good opportunity to see the culture, history and other things.
by
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By
 looking at the
past people
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past, people
 can really feel the importance and the
value
 of the present.
for
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For
 example, when a child learn about the culture and history that the country has,
this
 person can actually see the hard times and the people who
has died
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have died
 for her or his nation and
then
 can actually take care of it in the future.
in
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In
 summary, having a knowledge about the past is a very good way to have opinion about present and to understand the real
value
 of the present.
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