It is sometimes said that ‘travel broadens the mind’. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is an indisputable fact that travelling around the world plays an important role in sharpening one’s mind.
Although
travelling is associated with some threats like safety and fear of theft, I agree that these play a minimal role when compared with
advantages
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the advantages
. On the one hand, there are a couple of concerns people face while travelling to new places.
Firstly
, some travel enthusiasts feel making a memorable trip, with
such
ideology, they plan some adventurous activities
on
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in
visiting new places. But they fail to understand that there would be no proper guidance or supervisor’s set-up to monitor their activities. As there would be lack of expert supervision in
such
activities, many tourists are likely to meet with accidents and even lose their lives.
For example
, in 2019, a survey report showed that 30% of the 62 travelling destinations across the globe are
failed
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failing
to maintain safety standards as per tourist’s requirements.
Secondly
, travelling new places
also
create a fear of being theft. Because the majority of the tourist attractions
do not consists
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do not consist
of a primary income source, local people are inclined towards making easy money from visitors.
As a result
, in many
cases tourists
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cases, tourists
are robbed because of which it makes them difficult to reach back their homelands.
On the other hand
, travelling
also
has some potential benefits over these drawbacks. Primarily, it has a proven evidence of mind healing when a person is undergoing some disturbance in their life. In order to forget the past and avail a break from the present, visiting new places provides a sort of mental peace because of meeting new cultures and traditions. Nowadays,
this
theory is being suggested by psychiatrists as a part of their treatment process.
Furthermore
, travelling helps to direct thinking process in children. In recent times, it has been adopted by many schools and followed
mandatorily
by taking students on excursion for a day in a year. As students will be tied-up with the regular academic activities,
such
outings will help them to refresh and recharge their minds. In conclusion, despite the fact that drawbacks constituted with travel, I feel that there are some potential benefits that are associated with it will encourage us to look forward.
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