Many people believe that the high levels of violence in films today are causing serious social problems. What are these problems and how could they be reduced?

Nowadays, we are living in a time when many people may say that the level of

violence

in television and movies is extremely big and it might affect our social

life

. Honestly, I do not think that it is a big problem and I do not really think we can change it for somehow. It is true that people love

show

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the show

and action, as we can see in our history we always did it. Back in the days in Rome empire there were the gladiator battles and people were

daing

engage in

doing

dying

in the

show

, it was an absolutely terrible

show

but at the same time it was absolutely successful. People used to love it.

Then

, in the middle ages there were knightly tournaments, which were

also

quite dangerous. As we can see, during all of human

history people

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history, people

want to see the

show

. Today, we are living in a peaceful time and we do not see how people killing each other in real

life

, but we still need to see some action and technical progress gave us

this

opportunity, we have television and cinema. Hopefully, we do not see so much

violence

in real

life

, nowadays we can see it in movies. Of course we still have some problems

such as, sometimes

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sometimes, such as

children cannot understand that the

violence it

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violence, it

is not good and it was just a movie or tv

show

. Of course, we still have some problems with

violence

and sometimes children might understand it wrong, but I strongly believe that it is a problem of parents to describe for their children what is wrong and what is bad. From my point of view, we did a great step from the middle ages, now we do not need to see how knights are killing each other in real

life

, we can see it on TV sitting on the sofa. I hardly believe that we did a great step on the way to humanism, of course we still have some disadvantages, but I hope we can improve it in the near future.

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