Many people believe that the high levels of violence in films today are causing serious social problems. What are these problems and how could they be reduced?

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Nowadays, we are living in a time when many people may say that the level of
violence
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in television and movies  is extremely big and it might affect our social
life
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.  Honestly, I do not think that it is a big problem and I do not really think we can change it for somehow.  It is true that people love
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show
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the show
and action, as we can see in our history we always did it. Back in the days in Rome empire there were the gladiator battles and people were
daing
engage in
doing
dying
in the
show
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, it was an absolutely terrible
show
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but at the same time it was absolutely successful. People used to love it.
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, in the middle ages there were knightly tournaments, which were
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quite dangerous. As we can see, during all of human
history people
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history, people
want to see the
show
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.  Today, we are living in a peaceful time and we do not see how people killing each other in real
life
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, but we still need to see some action and technical progress gave us
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opportunity, we have television and cinema. Hopefully, we do not see so much
violence
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in real
life
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, nowadays we can see it in movies. Of course we still have some problems
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such as, sometimes
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sometimes, such as
children cannot understand that the
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violence it
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violence, it
is not good and it was just a movie or tv
show
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. Of course, we still have some problems with
violence
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and sometimes children might understand it wrong, but I strongly believe that it is a problem of parents to describe for their children what is wrong and what is bad.  From my point of view, we did a great  step from the middle ages, now we do not need to see how knights are killing each other in real
life
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, we can see it on TV sitting on the sofa. I hardly believe that we did a great step on the way to humanism, of course we still have some disadvantages, but I hope we can improve it in the near future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • desensitization
  • empathy
  • aggressive behaviors
  • imitation
  • antisocial behavior
  • normalization
  • climate of fear
  • perceptions
  • mental health
  • aggression
  • emotional regulation
  • trauma-related symptoms
  • age ratings
  • critical viewing skills
  • nonviolent entertainment
  • film industry
  • regulate
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