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Some graduates prefer to travel for a year between graduation and gaining a full time employment.Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this.

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After completing graduation, some people choose to join a full-
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 job, whereas some choose to go to journey for almost a year before joining the employment.In both the cases, an individual learns something and
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 loose something, as both cases have their own benefits and drawbacks, which I will explain in the following essay.
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 with, advantages,
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 can refresh his or herself and
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 regain the energy to get back to
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, after constant hard
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 of 4 or 5 years
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 may feel tired and may need some
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 to regain the enthusiasm to
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 again.
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 kind of
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 off may help them.
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,
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 can explore people, culture and other fields as well, which may be helpful to oneself to develop communication skills, increase knowledge and to explore other opportunities.To illustrate, some people from the fashion or journalism field may fine some other people with more experience or knowledge or even they can recognize their hidden talents.But travelling after graduation
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 has some drawbacks, which cannot be ignored. To talk about the disadvantages,
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 and foremost, after a gap of almost a year
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 may loose some may lose their skills of their respective fields.
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,
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 may lack a year of experience of
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, which may leave oneself behind from other colleagues.
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, if anyone chooses to take a break for a long
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, it is very obvious to lost command over some technical skills, which they have learned previously and that will affect their quality
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. To sum up, a long
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 span chosen to travel around after graduation may prove to be blessings or even a loss.Counting on benefits,
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 as regaining energy or acquiring more knowledge, and drawbacks like lost grip on some important skills and experience
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 should take a decision.

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