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Artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity. Some people think that artists should have total freedom to express any thoughts and ideas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Artists require the ability of expression to some extent to develop innovative ideas. Some people argue that full opportunity to express any opinion or ideas need to be given to artists. In my opinion, artists should be given enough power to express their ideas, but
total
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totally
 right is not required. Artists should have the liberty to express their views and original ideas without having to worry about the consequences. When they have the flexibility to express, more and more people will turn to the arts and
this
 will enrich our culture and civilisation.
Moreover
, many artists highlight several social issues and they spread awareness among the masses. Many of them stand for social justice. After a rape case of an 8 year old girl in India, many people expressed their anger and emotions through songs and these songs became viral on social media.
Thus it
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Thus, it
 aroused feelings of many people and the authorities were forced to take immediate action against the criminals.
However
, the art works should not have any destructive impact on the society. There have been several incidences where artworks like paintings created tension and violence.
For example
 M F Hussain’s paintings of nude Indian Goddesses created chaos among Hindu people.
In addition
 to
this
, objectifying women in various art works may negatively influence children and teenagers. They may see women as mere objects of lust and fail to respect them.
In other words
, creating negative emotions through art increases the crime and violence in the society and can lead to many problems. To conclude, some amount of power is necessary for artists to thrive;
however
, total right can be a bad thing because it will encourage at least some artists to create artworks that have a negative impact on the society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • creativity
  • freedom of expression
  • innovative
  • ethical considerations
  • societal morals
  • unregulated
  • provoke thought
  • controversy
  • government regulation
  • censorship
  • diverse perspectives
  • artistic expression
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