Women are better at childcare than men therefore they should focus more on raising children and less on their working life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people claim that women are more adept in
children
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child
care
and they must concentrate on it rather than work and career. I am partly фпккн with
this
point of view, but
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
do not think that women have to make
this
choice  between family and job.I hardly believe, in our modern society couples can
care
about their children together.These days in some countries and cultures we can still see that women usually
care
about children's food and cleaning.
For
instance in
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instance, in
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of or relating to Saudi Arabia or its people
Saudi
Arabia women cannot work without permission from her husband or father. In my country, Russia we
also
have a
lots
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lot
of discrimination,
ferstly
before anything else
firstly
women has
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less
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salory
,
secondly they
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secondly, they
  rarely can be a manager and
finally
, company often prefer to hire men.At the same time in the
first
world country
such
as the United States, Germany and The United Kingdom we may notice absolutely different situations. As we can see, women have all rights as men, they can
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stay in one place and anticipate or expect something
wait
vote
, be whatever they want to be, they even have a possibility to be a president.  According to
this
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
would say that nowadays we are equal and we do not have to choose between work and having a baby.  In Holland there is a really nice program where men can
also
have the holidays to
care
for their child in his
first
few months.   I strongly believe that lots of country getting more and more equal and people like it, it is no
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a vaguely specified concern
matter
mater
matters
who you are, what is your sex, and what is your skin colour we all humans. T believe that both parents have to
care
about the baby and support each other.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender roles
  • nurturing
  • empathy
  • sensitivity
  • maternal instinct
  • paternal involvement
  • child's development
  • work-life balance
  • gender equality
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