Today, TV channels broadcast man’s sport shows more than women’s sports shows. Why? Should TV channels give equal showtime for women’s sport and men’s sport?

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Tournaments are events involving both human genders. In recent times, male game programs have been aired more frequently than female athletic events.
This
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essay would examine why both sexes should be given a fair chance of having their activities reported by visual media agencies.
Firstly
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, it has been observed that a major reason why masculine games are more broadcast is largely due to the unavailability of the
womenfolk
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women folk
to participate in rehearsals. A 2017 study carried out by Professor Brezen of the Sporting Institute of Venezuela and reported in the Life sports magazine, showed that about 85℅ of women failed to attend rehearsals when compared with the male counterpart who had a 95℅ positive attendance rate;
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the
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women, citing
the importance to respond promptly and regularly to the needs of family members, as
been
the state or fact of existing
being
more pressing and of
immense fulfilment
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the immense fulfilment
to
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of
them, than having to run around pitches or catching an inanimate object like a ball. Clearly, if the epileptic tendency of attendance at
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practice, we're
to continue, it would stall progress in female sports and may lessen funding from sports stalwarts and enthusiasts, making it an unprofitable venture to invest in, and announce.
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, men's sport has garnered a wider acceptance, because of the financial gains associated with it. The frequency with which fixtures are published has increased the rate of betting on one hand, and on the other,
cable subscription
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cable, subscription
, which has translated into more gains for the media houses, so much that there's a stiff purchase competition to own the broadcast right of masculine sporting. It seems safe to advise that any sporting event seeking to thrive, enjoy funding and consistent publicity, must
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be efficient in its own games.
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the female competition may not be as regular as their opposite
sex's
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sexes
, it should in no wise be robbed of equal timing, rather, an introduction of mixed-sex games;
which
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Which
would involve the whole family, can be considered, the way forward, since women have a soft spot for family time and
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it would increase the viewing audience category.
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