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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

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According to individual liking and desire of living in a bigger house, new homes are getting constructed rapidly. Some people are building them in the countryside because of less space in the city, while others disagree in order to save or conserve the environment. In my opinion, proper planning on building a house could help the society and nature, without disturbing the natural beauty of one’s surroundings.
To begin
 with, people need big houses because of growing population or bigger size of family.
Consequently
, people are moving to the surroundings where they can build a spacious house as per their need since there is no space left in the city.
For example
, children can have a substantial area like garden to play, which is only possible in the wide open area.
Additionally
, latest techniques are influencing some people to build new homes,
for example
, stylish furniture, stupendous woodwork and fancy fittings. So, in order to fulfil their wishes, they require upgrading their houses with the newest technology.
On the other hand
, some people contradict because they think that building new homes in the landscape may harm the environment and as well as could be detrimental for the economy. The terrain is known for its lush green beauty with greenery all over. People should,
however enjoy
Accept comma addition
however, enjoy
 by going there for family get-together
instead
 of living there.
Moreover
, farmers
also
 have to bear the cost, since they had to cut down their farms in order to undergo the construction of new homes.
This
 has adverse effects on agricultural economy of a nation. At
last
, in my opinion, the Government has to step forward and provide people with latest housing provisions by adequate arrangement since both the views are correct and acceptable.
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  • Carbon sequestration
  • Sustainable development
  • Eco-friendly building materials
  • Green architecture
  • Government policies
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  • Population growth
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