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Some people hesitate between getting a job and starting their own business. While the idea of not having a boss and working on one's own schedule may sound tempting, financial risks and stress sometimes outweigh these advantages. In your opinion what are the pros and cons of working in a company?

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There are times when those working in a corporate setting may wonder if life would be better running their own business. Before considering opening a small enterprise, it may be worth examining the positive and negative aspects of working for a
company
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. I will discuss my views on both the good and bad elements of corporate
work
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 in the following paragraphs. There are clearly some positive aspects
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 working for a corporation,
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 few people would do it. Being an
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 worker myself, I believe that the best part of working for a large organisation is the predictable
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 stream. The ability to accurately predict future
cashflows
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cash flows
 simplifies life tasks
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 as budgeting, mortgage applications, and setting savings targets. Additional benefits of working for a
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 are lower
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 and lower invested capital requirements. The corporation takes on nearly all of the legal liability, investment
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, while
for
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of
 an employee the only
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 is potential loss of
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 via redundancy or dismissal.
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, in a small business, the owner takes on all of the aforementioned risks, along with significant
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. While there are upsides to the corporate
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 experience, there are
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 significant issues. The most obvious problem is that with limited
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 there is an associated limit on
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 potential. In most
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 jobs,
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 is generally fixed as a base salary plus, potentially, some bonus based on performance.
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, when I consider how most people achieve great personal wealth, it is usually through successful entrepreneurship, and in rare cases, climbing to the very top of the corporate ladder. Attaining top
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 positions is often fraught with
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 politics and navigating sometimes toxic
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 cultures, which is another major downside to working for a corporation. As a small business operator, one rarely has a manager telling one what to do, or standing in the way of personal growth. For most people, investing most or all of their capital in a new venture can be terrifying. The lower
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 and greater predictability associated with corporate
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 can be quite comforting, and despite the limited revenue growth and
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 politics, these benefits are sufficiently enticing to sway people over to
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 in offices.
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, for those who seek earnings upside and self-determination in their corporate lives, there are options. One can always try hybrid roles,
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 as sales
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, which combines a base salary plus unlimited commission, which may bring some additional
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, but
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 much more potential reward.

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