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Not enough students around the world choose to study science subjects at university. what are the reasons for this? what impact does this issue have on society?

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Technology is rapidly changing the lives of people around the world, creating a high demand for
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 graduates with a background in
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.
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, the number of students studying the relevant subject is well below the required level.
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 problem seems to be caused by outdated preconceptions, which determine young people's choices today. One of those preconceptions is that certain subjects are better suited for men. Examples of these include mathematics, computer
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, technologies and other fields of knowledge, which are totally dominated by males. In recent decades, a noticeable progress has been achieved by many countries in acknowledging that men and women are equally capable in
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. Despite
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 big step towards equality, female employees may still feel unwelcome or, in some instances, face evident discrimination in male-dominated work environments.
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, many women with a natural inclination to
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 settles in studying humanities or social
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 at
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, depriving society of their main talent. Another reason for the lack of
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 students spreads even wider. In the past, scientists were paid significantly less than professional in
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, ambitious young people tended to choose highly paid occupations, disregarding their aptitude for
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. Things have changed, today jobs in
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 are among those with highest remuneration, but
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 trend is yet to be reflected in the
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 application numbers.
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, in the UK, over half of the international students still choose to study for a degree in business.
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,
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economies around the world are affected with an oversupply of social
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 graduates with technical skills. Not surprisingly, complaints of fresh graduates who cannot find are frequent. To Conclude, it seems some young people still perceive studying
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 as a route towards a mediocre income from a job where most of one's colleagues are men.
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, too many opt for a degree in social sciences, creating an imbalanced society
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 highly-educated
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 graduates struggle to find a skilled job

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