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Some believe that people who physical work should be paid on par with the people who have high level degree. Do you agree or disagree?

It is argued by many individuals that the labourers should earn wages on the same
as
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level as
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 skilled
workers
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. I completely disagree with
this
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 opinion because of the difference in the required skills by both
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types of
jobs
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 and potential hindrances in the development of a country where
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 strategy is implemented.
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 with, the difference in the salary levels of the
workers
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 carrying out physically demanding
jobs
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 and degree-requiring
jobs
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are
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is
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 completely justified because of the complexity differences
,
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.
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This
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 is because a
job
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 where a
high level
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high-level
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 degree
is required
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usually asks for years of formal education. So, the magnitude of knowledge achieved in order to be worthy of these
jobs
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 beats the hard work put in the other types of
jobs
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.
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,
doctor
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doctors
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 who
study
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have studied for
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 about 8 years and
practice
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practised
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about
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for about
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 2 years are the only skilled
workers
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 who can carry out complicated surgeries.
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, employees, if they are paid
according to
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 the
job
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 complexity, help fuel a country's scientific development. The reason for
this
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 is that the variance in salary levels inspires most
workers
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 to get an intricate
job
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 in Science or Technology. On survey,
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, by India Tomorrow magazine illustrated that most parents prepare their children for scientific
jobs
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 by teaching them how to code as opposed to the
jobs
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 in manual labour
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jobs.
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, when a country pays its most
skillful
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skilled
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workers
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 more, it essentially accelerates the scientific development. In conclusion, one school of thought argues for equality in the wages earned by
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employees working in different
job
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 profiles, mainly degree professionals and non-degree
workers
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. In my opinion, because of the intricacies involved in their
jobs
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 and their contributions to Science and Technology, professional
jobs
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 should be valued more than physical work.

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