You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter describe the training course you want to do explain what the company could do to help you say how the course will be useful for your job

Dear Sir and Madam, I am writing in relation to an ongoing Azure
cloud
service training
course
available on Udemy. I am requesting management to purchase
this
course
as I am confident enough that with the help of
this
course
, I will be in a good position in terms of Azure understanding. About the
course
, it is
a
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an

The article a may be incorrect. Consider changing it to agree with the beginning sound of the following word AZ-900.

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AZ-900 Azure fundamentals training which
glance
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glances

The plural verb glance does not appear to agree with the singular subject a AZ-900 Azure fundamentals training. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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over the entire
cloud
service. As you know I do not have knowledge of Azure resources. It would be much helpful if the company can buy
this
online
course
for me. I will get a chance to learn about the Azure from the beginning and with practical demonstrations. As all our products are deployed in the
cloud
, getting familiar with
Cloud
services will polish my programming skills and I will be able to manage our online resources efficiently.
This
will eventually bring improvement
within
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our software team. I look forward to
hear
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hearing

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back from you soon. Yours Sincerely, Simran
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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