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In the past, most people spend their entire career working for one company, whereas people nowadays move from one job to another. What are the advantages and disadvantages of each? Which do you think is better? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the past, the majority of people worked for
one
 company throughout their life, whereas people nowadays move between jobs. In my opinion, despite there being many financial benefits to having a
one
-company career, it is better to switch workplaces regularly in order to fully develop. On the
one
 hand, people working for
one
 company for their whole life often given financial stability. They normally accrue financial rewards
such
 as a higher salary and a decent pension plan.
However
, you couldn't get exposure to the whole industry because your network in the industry is very limited to
one
 company.
For instance
, 60% of long-term employees claim that
one
 of the main reason why they can't be successful in jobs is because of the reduced per cent of working with other employees in other fields. Even with the earning potential increases every year, the limit of throwing yourself into the whole industry result in having difficulty in expanding relationships and seizing opportunities for career advancement.
On the other hand
, jumping from
this
 job to another job aid you in maintaining your passion and building a network faster. The new tasks that you get every time switching jobs keep
challenges
Suggestion
the challenges
 fresh because you will have knowledge of a variety of industries, procedures, and software. The main advantage of having a variety of experience is a qualification for more jobs. By changing jobs frequently, you can associate with more people working in many fields who are likely to help you out with difficulties.
Although
 a hopping jobs person often lacks the in-depth knowledge acquired in a particular field, having many support and passion for working will promote you to develop yourself and finish works more effectively. In conclusion, I believe that despite there being many financial benefits to having a
one
-company career, it is better to switch workplaces regularly in order to fully develop.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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