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Some people think that success is the best measures for intelligence, while others think that intelligence can be measured in other ways. What is your opinion?

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Certain individuals often believe that
success
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 implies to the
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intelligence whereas
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intelligence, whereas
, others assume that intellectuals can be assessed by various other means. In my opinion, it is not essential to be intelligent to be successful.
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, it is essential to understand the description of
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. It is an accomplishment of a
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person's
 aim where it is nowhere stated about the
intelligence
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. People are successful when they hold a strong will power and personality.
Success
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 gets a whole new direction when an individual has a solid approach towards any circumstances they come through. Even if they fall short in any area, they overcome their shortcoming and reach
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.
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, sports
personalities not
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personalities, not
 very often they succeed, with their continual attempts, they enter the ladder of achievements. In terms of
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, there have been varied ways to
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consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
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 and evaluate a
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person's
intelligence
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. There had been many quiz shows or tests organized on a higher level to test an individual IQ.
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, those who performed exceptionally well in those tests are not successful in life.
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, the students who scored a hundred percent in their engineering exams are not the best engineers in the world. In short,
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 is just a
person
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person's
 capacity to reach the purpose in his life with a tough approach concerning any situations. In my opinion, being intelligent is not a successful personality In life.
Success
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 comes to those who are diligent and resilient.
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