A government's role is only to provide defense capability and urban infrastructure, such as roads, water and power. All other services, such as education, health and social security, should be provided by private groups or individuals in the community. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that protecting national security and maintaining the inviolate territory from other countries as well as furnishing the essential facilities including water and energy are an authority's responsibility. I,
however
, completely agree with those who believe that the government should
also
supply the fields, namely curriculum, the healthcare and the community welfare system,
instead
of organizations, individuals in the society.
To begin
with, obviously, a state's role is the macroscopic management, including enacting feasible policies and investing the national budget in the areas that
initially
serve benefits of the public. The education system that plays an important role in paving the way for the development of a country, would reap certain benefits of
such
policies, especially the government assists to build new schools and pays the wage for teachers, and forecast the manpower demand of the community. Some studies showed that associations tend to allocate their capital for the services
such
as vocational schools and language centres rather than for the science-relate occupations because of the shorter payback on their investment and the lower the risks.
Therefore
, letting these companies provide the curriculum, is likely to create more disadvantages than the advantages.
In addition
, perhaps, it seems to me that the idea, allowing individuals and personal organizations supply the health and social security area may be impossible for
this
service requires the great fund with a long-term period and the huge human resources.
Besides
, the unequal competitive and exclusiveness
also
might stem from companies owning the health care and welfare field. In recent researches indicated that the expense of basic medical examination, the expenditure for insurance package, and the price of medicine in some developed countries in which there are a variety of hospitals operated by private associations are higher than that in developing nations.
Consequently
, a number of poors cannot afford to pay the medical consultation and treatment expenses, which means the distance among strata in the society could be widened, the community,
thus
, would fail to thrive. In conclusion, the concept that organizations and individuals furnishing the social services, education area and the health-related and welfare filed
in particular
, is taken into consideration.
However
, I concur that the government should shoulder
this
mission.
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