Nowadays, there is a trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive development. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The famous quote from the movie, Spiderman, "with great power comes great responsibility", fits well in
this
situation, where Media today only focuses on the
clickbaits
articles that can generate more eyeballs on their
webpages
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web pages
and increase their TRP.
This
essay
further
discusses on how media affects the mental health of our
socity
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
and
individuales
a human being
individuals
by only
focuing
the concentration of attention or energy on something
focusing
on the issues and
nagative
characterized by or displaying negation or denial or opposition or resistance; having no positive features
negative
side of the
world
. It creates
panic
and anxiety within the
world
and portrays a
basied
version of our
sroundings
the environmental condition
surroundings
. Many studies suggest that the more negative news one consumes, which remains the majority share of news
type broadcasted
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type, broadcasted
today, the more anxious one will become. Hearing only about bomb blasts, kidnappings, and government
scandels
disgraceful gossip about the private lives of other people
scandals
can hurt our mental health and increases the
anxity
(psychiatry) a relatively permanent state of worry and nervousness occurring in a variety of mental disorders, usually accompanied by compulsive behavior or attacks of panic
anxiety
, while decreasing the hope for
better future
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a better future
.
For example
,
last
month my home country Pakistan
imporved
made more desirable or valuable or profitable; especially made ready for use or marketing
improved
its
possition
the particular portion of space occupied by something
position
in the index of
dengirous
involving or causing danger or risk; liable to hurt or harm
dangerous
countries in the
world
,
however
, media heavily covered the
plan
an aircraft that has a fixed wing and is powered by propellers or jets
plane
crash happening around the same time in Karachi, resulting into 90% decline in domestic air travel.
Furthermore
, only reporting
emerrgencies
a sudden unforeseen crisis (usually involving danger) that requires immediate action
emergencies
can
also
create unnecessary
panic
in societies, and create a void for
spamers
someone who sends unwanted email (often in bulk)
spammers
and fake-news army to fill, misleading more people
as a result
. When people are only fed with
uncocked
not firmly fastened or secured
unlocked
uncooked
news about
emergencies it
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emergencies, it
creates questions, which creates a sense of emergency and
panic
.
For example
, when the COVID-19
pandamic
epidemic over a wide geographical area
pandemic
hit the
world
in February,
premeture
born after a gestation period of less than the normal time
premature
media reports
disruppted
marked by breaks or gaps
disrupted
the nation in my country, which created a
panic
and resulted into riots
agaist
in contact with
against
government
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the government
. In
colcusion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
, I think
media
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the media
has a power to shape thinking, which they should be
using
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used
more
creafully
taking care or paying attention
carefully
and try to show a whole picture rather
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
create a bubble around us. Governments can
also
play a role in solving
this
problem by tightly regulating the bodies.
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