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Governments in many countries have recently introduced special taxes on foods and beverages with high levels of sugar. Some think these taxes are a good idea while others disagree. Discuss both views and give you own opinion.

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There are members
in
Suggestion
of
 our society who favour sugar tax,
that is
 an additional tax which will be levied on sugary foods. There are other people who are opposed to
such
 a law. In my opinion, there is a benefit in introducing
such
 an initiative. Recent years have seen an increase in obesity among
general population
Suggestion
the general population
, As a matter of fact, studies have attributed
this
 to increased consumption of foods and beverages with high level of sugar.
Moreover
, continuous consumption of
such
 foods can cause early onset of
diabetis
a polygenic disease characterized by abnormally high glucose levels in the blood; any of several metabolic disorders marked by excessive urination and persistent thirst
diabetes
. Several governments have introduced additional taxes on these products to discourage people
for
Suggestion
from
 buying
such
 food.
Additional revenue
Suggestion
The additional revenue
 generated because of
this
 tax can be used to fund new initiatives.
However
,
this
 will not stop people from using sugary food and drinks.
Goverment
Suggestion
The government
Government
 should start new initiatives that
promotes
Suggestion
promote
 a healthy lifestyle. Increased awareness
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • processed foods
  • punitive measures
  • revenue
  • public health campaigns
  • awareness
  • government overreach
  • personal freedoms
  • unhealthy diets
  • economic burden
  • sugar-related health issues
  • consumer behavior
  • taxation
  • high levels of sugar
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