Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, when
tourism
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becomes the main economy in many nations. There is a
debates
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debate
that travelling aboard makes conflicts between local people and visitors. I agree with
this
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viewponit
a mental position from which things are viewed
viewpoint
at some extent
First
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of all, personality can be a reason to make the
agruments
a fact or assertion offered as evidence that something is true
arguments
. There are some self-fish persons who travel with
an
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a
rigid attitude, never want to absorb new cultures and always treat instinctively.
This
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lead
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leads
to incorrect
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
with
locals
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local
people which makes tensions between countries.
For instance
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, some Korean visitors travel to Da Nang in sensitive time when the germ of pandemic corona appeared. They made negative things about
quality
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the quality
of services and
quarentine
enforced isolation of patients suffering from a contagious disease in order to prevent the spread of disease
quarantine
guarantee
in Viet Nam which makes
netizens
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got up with censures.
However
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, small misapprehensions
indeliberately
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lead to big problems. To illustrate
,
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,
a lot of pagodas and
spritiual
concerned with sacred matters or religion or the church
spiritual
areas
also
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are
tourist attraction
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a tourist attraction
tourist attractions
. People
visitting
the activity of making visits
visiting
there need to wear politely, some western tourist
do not understand
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does not understand
this
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rule and coming with unsuitable clothes which due to arguments On the other hands, travelling and overseas
tourism
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as a whole contribute hugely benefits to get understanding. While social network and newspaper bring information about foreign cultures, overseas
tourism
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have
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has
chances to
experiences
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experience
unique customs and exchange
knowgele
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with locals which increase understanding.
In addition
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, a lot of travellers wanted to become a part of the country after they visit.
For example
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, a lot of foreigners want to live in Viet Nam after visiting
to
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with
country In conclusion, in my opinion, international
tourism
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could have some merits;
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however in
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however, in
some cases it can cause tension between people.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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