people think that government should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles to solve environmental problems. Give your opinion

On the one hand, there are manifold brilliant benefits that we should pay attention to. When the cost of petrol climbs it means that those who travel by private vehicles have to pay more money on their transporting. So as
tho
in the direction of
to
save money for other needs, more and more people are likely to choose public transportation or motor vehicles which work by using
alternative source
Suggestion
alternative sources
an alternative source
of energy.
For instance
, without a high amount of salary, employees will choose to become train passengers to go to the office as they can save
large amount
Suggestion
large amounts
a large amount
of money.
On the other hand
, there are many noticeable drawbacks should be taken into consideration, One those who have to use public transport they are more likely to face dozens of issues like unable to go to work on time because the delays of train, bus
...
Accept space
...
Additionally
, in developing areas
such
as Asia, Africa...
there
Suggestion
There
are not enough route to meet the requirements of
residents
Suggestion
the residents
to travel by public transportation seemed to be impossible at all. To draw a conclusion, every coin has its two
side
Suggestion
sides
so that the given solution is really engrossing but
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quantifier; used with either mass or count nouns to indicate the whole number or amount of or every one of a class
all
should be considered carefully before applying to reality.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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