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Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake. Regadless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university ?

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Understanding and capability for the future
job
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 are now considered as the essential things for undergraduates.
Thus
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, several people reckon that the purpose of universities is to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 those things. Whereas, others believe that universities need to bring knowledge relating to its true aim even that might not helpful to
worker
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the worker
workers
. I agree with the
first
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 idea while I accept that the latter could
right
produce a literary work
write
 in some extents. On the one hand, learning about the practical knowledge and skills could be advantageous to future jobs.
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, people tend to obtain
instantly acceptable salary
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an instantly acceptable salary job
job
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 to support their lives after graduation.
Instead
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 of picking some underpaid works or waiting a while for continuing or developing a new specialized skill, individuals who are capable to perform specific tasks as they gained from
school
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the school
 will get immediately terrific employments.
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, when it comes to
job
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 orientation, confusion in choosing
career path
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a career path
 is a primary element
to
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of
 failing
in
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to
 reach out dream jobs. Perceiving up-to-date skills will be given students a general view in working towards higher positions in the near future while
majority
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the majority
 of peers are attempting what employment is
suit
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suited
 for.
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, some others reckon that education would be provided by universities in terms of
complete
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completeness
completion
, not affected by crowd’s thought concerning wage. Several individuals recognized the steady
job
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 might lead to the fixed mindset that influence
negativity
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negatives
 to
development
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develop
 could be far away in extremely creative
job
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 markets.
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 some universities are now operating the way which could provide comprehensive person in
long-term even
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the long-term, even
the long-term even
 though it may not fit to some short-term targets.
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, visionary individuals who gained
solid basis education
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a solid basis education
 could reach fullest potential to become managers or leaders over a long period. In conclusion, whereas supporting the idea that universities need to generate skilled people who have
valuable grasp
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a valuable grasp
 for companies. I partly agree
to
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with
 the notion regarding teaching for
university’s own reason whether
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a university’s own reason, whether
a university’s own reason whether
university’s own reasons whether
 understanding suit to employment or not.
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