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Education should be accessible to people of all economic backgrounds. All levels of education, from primary school to territory education, should be free. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

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Education
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 has been of top priority in society at all times, which leads to a contention that the tuition for learners from elementary school to university and college should be abolished.
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 argument can be justified to some extent, I am strongly convinced that
students
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 from territory schools should be charged. On the one hand, it is my belief that
students
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 from primary schools to high schools need not settle the payment whereby the
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 academic level of citizens within countries
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 likely to be extended . It is obvious that children are the future of each nation, which generates the importance of primary
education
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. Take Vietnam as a telling example, the continuous years of war had addressed illiteracy a burning issue.
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, the financial ability of Vietnamese, especially rural dwellers, is limited and most parents are not able to
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 their children
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education
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.
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, if tuition is free for children aged
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 6 to 18, the educational scale of nations is likely to be broadened.
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, it appears to me that
students
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 of higher
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 should pay for their studies. Indeed,
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the non-tuition
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 study is prone to activate
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 of irresponsibility in pupils.
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 is well illustrated by the fact that
students
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 can simply become indolent in regard to the allegation of retaking examinations without
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 burden when they fail to pass the credits.
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,
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 learners do not have to save
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 for studying, they possibly tend not to take their schoolwork into thorough consideration.
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, it is a total agreement that studies at universities and colleges should not be free. In conclusion, I believe that primary
education
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students
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 can have
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 system
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 higher
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 learners should settle payment for studies.
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Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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