Nowadays in many countries more and more people are spending their time away from their families. Why is this? What are the effects on themselves and on their families?

It is true that focusing on working and studying make family members do not have enough
time
to be close. That leads to
many impacts
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the many impacts
to their
life
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life, such
such
as emotions, quality of life and understanding each other. There are various reasons why people might argue that people do not have
time
for their family.
Firstly
, both parents often work full
time
,
hence
they spend less
time
with their children. My
uncle
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uncle's
family is an example, he and his wife work all
day even
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day, even
in the evening, so their children left babysitters or alone.
Besides
, nowadays children have to study much at school and less contact with their family members. I always want to have
time
with my family but due to studying much at university
,
Accept space
,
so it is difficult for me to spend my
time
with them. Working and studying are two main factors make people could not spend
time
on enjoying life with family. With these lifestyles, people become much
busy
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busier
and cause many impacts to them. The
first
effect is gapping between parents and children. When family members do not spend
time
together, they could not have
chance
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a chance
the chance
to understand each other and
then
they tend
to be disagree
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to disagree
in various cases. Another point is that their children might have negative
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviours
. When parents do not spend
time
for their kids, they will have much
time
with their friends and
then
they could learn bad things
such
as
cheat
talk socially without exchanging too much information
chat
, play games or even nip.
Thus
, spending less
time
for family leads to many bad effects. In conclusion, working and studying are key implements for spending less
time
for their
family which
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family, which
cause various effects for children
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
and
relationship
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the relationship
between parents and kids. It would be necessary for humans to try to invest
time
sharing difficulties and happiness with family members.
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