Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree of disagree?

Many people argued that voluntary social activities have to be included in senior high
school
pupils’ education system. I am totally supporting the statement because of these benefits Community services play an important role in improving people’s understanding
to
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of
each other and
this
is essential for teenagers’ mental education. Schools are just able to teach students
academic knowledge
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the academic knowledge
in order to provide them cognitive thought about the world, so they are lack of sympathetic feeling
to
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for
of
the society.
For example
, a recent research which was
taken
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taking
place in Ngo Quyen High
School
shows that 62% of their students are weak in controlling inappropriate
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
in conservations between people, but after doing social activities which are organized by the
school
,
this
number
is dropped
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has dropped
drops
to less than 10%.
This
can be a great advantage for students in their future It can be seen from the fact that most of the students who have attended unpaid community services are likely to get the job that they want. The main reason is that most companies are highly
evaluate
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evaluated
what you have done for the community, not just only for yourself.
For instance
, all the companies in the U.K will ask interviewees about community services they have done in the
first
interview to access their talents.
However
,
this
aspect
just contribute
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just contributes
a part in your future career. To sum up, it can be predicted that with the advances associated with students’ approaching, volunteering in high
school
will be an important role in the
school
life of pupils
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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