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Some people say that educational success most of the time depends on having a good teacher. Others say that student attitudes also do matters. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There is no doubt that without having a higher degree a man cannot survive in
this
 world.
However
, while some people think that the achievement of students is exclusively depend on the instructor's teaching skills, others consider which is purely upon the children attitude and interest. In my opinion, I strongly think that the pupil need to take the
incharge
contribute to the progress or growth of
encourage
 of their academic performance. On the one hand, it is sometimes believed that the teaching faculties' instructions have a huge impact on how attainable their students. In other wards, they are professionally trained to guide and assess the future generation to attain the highest level of education.
For example
, by explaining the syllabus and giving practice on various subjects would make the young
citizents
a native or naturalized member of a state or other political community
citizens
 to become a task oriented. Alternatively, lack of teachers' control
on
Suggestion
of
 students may deviate and end up in joining some illegal activities.
On the other hand
, opponents of the above belief state that the children may have an active role in determining their future.
This
 is because even though schools can provide a learning platform to the school attendees, they should work hard to get a good score. Nobody can inject any wisdom to others, until they take a real effort to succeed.
For instance
, if go through the successful heroes' life, it can be evident that they reached their destination as their passion for the particular activity and determination for achievement. In conclusion, people have
different viewpoint
Suggestion
different viewpoints
a different viewpoint
 on who is responsible for producing a well known or skilled person.While some consider that teachers play a crucial role, the opposite side mentions that
this
 is schoolers
himselves
. I
also
 believe the latter is right.
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