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Topic 2: The range and quality of food that we can buy has changed because of technological and scientific advances. Some people regard this change as an improvement, while others believe that it is harmful. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Thanks to technological and scientific advances, the
food
 the
buy
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buyer
 has changed in
varies
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varying
varied
 and quality. While some people think it has more drawbacks, in my opinion, it has more merits for society.
This
 development
also
 has drawbacks. Many people distrust foods that have been modified or processed because they think their quality might be not good enough to use. They prefer organic foods which are produced without chemicals. Farming without fertilizers or pesticides is more environmentally friendly in
long term
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the long term
. There may be risk involved in the genetic engineering of foods. Genetically modified crops might change whole ecosystems.
Food
 chains could be broken if crops are resistant to predators, and
this
 might affect not only human but
also
 other animals in the world. With the development of technology in
food
 growth, it will benefit farmers in terms of time and profits.
Firstly
, farmers can produce crops that grow bigger and faster,
for example
, my father growth crops in 4 months can get results
instead
 of 6 months before.
Besides
, genetically modified crops may be more resistant to disease or insects.
This
 could be important for
food
 production in developing countries where their population
is overwhel
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is overwhelming
is overwhelm
has overwhelmed
overwhelms
.
Furthermore
, faster growing cereals, fruit and vegetables will mean more profit, which encourage more farmers involving in planting.
Food
 can be modified to look perfect or
last
 longer,
this
 would create a chance for people in another country
to have
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have
 a chance to enjoy fruit which was imported for a month for months before.
This
 may be more attractive to customers. In conclusion, despites of the fact that
food
 crops have changed have more drawbacks, I think that it still has more positive impacts on farmers.
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