Some people think women should be allowed to join the army, the navy and the air force just like men. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer.

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It is
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united by being of the same opinion
agreed
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agree
that whether women should participate in military like men or not. While some people think women should be given chance to choose military as a career
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,
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I
think some disadvantages of joining
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the military
of women is quite significant. On the one hand, it is undeniable that women possess intelligence as good as men, even sometimes they are trusted more than men by their carefulness. They have
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contributed significantly to the successes in some vital areas
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as government or military.
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, Bui Thi Xuan is an outstanding female general of Tay
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led Vietnamese soldiers to defeat invaders from Qing dynasty.
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, letting women join the army
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shows advances about sexual equality. Through thousands of
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in the past,
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the military
was considered as a
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man's
men's
responsibility.
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, when women embark on military,
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not only helps men to reduce the burden, but
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make them more sympathy
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, when some of women get achievements in military, they will be more confident and they can raise their position which leads to more
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, because
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the military
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is a career that requires strength a lot, men have
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an overwhelming advantage
the overwhelming advantage
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compared to women when men are biologically much
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stronger
than women. Women
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are
likely to
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find, more
difficult to take military equipment or walk in a long distance. In conclusion,
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there are some reasons supporting women to join the military,
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i believe that they
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should consider carefully about choosing it as their career
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender equality
  • combat roles
  • physical prowess
  • stamina
  • dynamics
  • cohesion
  • resilience
  • integration
  • gender disparities
  • morale
  • recruitment
  • retention
  • biological differences
  • stereotypes
  • feminism
  • glass ceiling
  • break barriers
  • pioneer
  • groundbreaking
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