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Many high school students take part time jobs. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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Most of the students who are studying in universities usually do a part
time
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work
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. I will discuss both, positive and negative points of doing a temporary
job
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 with studies. As it is the ground a fact that organizations seek for those candidates who has some practical experience along with the academic degree. It will be a beneficial for a student to get an opportunity
of
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to
work
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 during studies in order to gain hands-on skills side by side.
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,
individual
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individuals
an individual
the individual
 can afford their educational expenses and become more responsible.
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 to
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, a student can
also
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 get the idea of his field of interest and the market value of his field.
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, I am doing MBA in a finance but during
job
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 I realized that I am more focused on marketing. I can switch my major subjects and take a right decision at the right
time
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. On the flip side, there are some
draw backs
the quality of being a hindrance
drawbacks
 of doing part
time
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job
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 with studies. Many students lost their interest in
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 education because they think they can earn without
degree
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a degree
.
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, some students cannot manage
work
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 and
job
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 together that causes depression and
effects
the conscious subjective aspect of feeling or emotion
affects
 their mental and physical health. For that reason, a person may quit his graduation. In summary, getting
education
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an education
 and the hands on
work
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 experience at the same
time
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 will be a good option for a student. They can be
more confidence
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more confident
 and social unless
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 does not
effects
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affect
affects
 the mental health and studies.
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