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In many countries, fast food is becoming cheaper and more widely available. Do the disadvantages of this outweigh the advantages?

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Nowadays, in most of countries, instant
food
 trend is rapidly growing because of it"s inexpensiveness and wide range of availability.
Although
, junk
food
 is a risk for communicable diseases due to busiest lifestyle in modern society people are used to it. Today,
this
 unhealthy
food
 style is a severe threat to the community because of it"s numerous disadvantages. One evident drawback in having snack
food
 is, the obvious risk of communicable diseases.
Such
 as, cancer, diabetes mellitus and obesity. Novel health statistics are revealing not only children, but
also
 adults are suffering from the above diseases due to
this
 inappropriate
food
 style. Unhealthy
food
 is very delicious, attractive and sweeten than healthy
food
 prepared at home. Due to that, kids are more prone to having them.
Furthermore
, it is a
way
 of wasting money.
However
, it is cheaper, when we spend daily, it accumulates a lot.
On the other hand
, there are some advantages in junk
food
.
For instance
, Potato chips, roasted chicken, frozen
food
 and canned
food
 is very cheaper than healthy meal.
For example
, homemade rice and curry. Due to it"s low cost any level of family group could buy it at any place. Currently, all the family members, including father, mother and even children are in a race. All of them are busy and they do not have time to prepare meals.
Therefore
, snack
food
 is very easier
way
 to them than spend time for cooking. Today, junk
food
 is famous among the people because it is ready made and low cost.
However
, it creates a human being unhealthy for a long term and even medicines are unavailable for those diseases. It is not a good habit to have
snaks
a light informal meal
snacks
snakes
 whether it is easy or not. We have to change our lifestyles into the healthy
food
way
,
iffood
Suggestion
if food
way if
Accept comma addition
way, if
 we want to live long being healthy.
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