While it is sometimes thought that prison is the best place for criminals, some others think there are better ways to deal with them. Discuss both view and give your opinion

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Crime is a serious and growing problem in most societies. It is thought that

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is the best place for keeping

law-breakers

someone who violates the law

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, while it is argued that there are

other several ways to

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several other ways to

address them. While I accept that the best way to reduce crime is to give

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sentences, I

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believe that there are alternative ways that will be more effective. On the one hand, there are a number of reasons why some believe that criminals should be sent to

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. Criminals who commit serious damage to

others

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others, such

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as robbery, violence or even homicides,

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is a place to keep them away from the community, which ensures innocent people’s safety. In

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law-breakers

someone who violates the law

lawbreakers

lawbreakers'

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have a chance to engage in rehabilitation programmes

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as vocational training, voluntary works, manual labour.

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, in the long term

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is the best deterrent for their bad actions.

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, after a long time they could change their awareness of mistakes and become productive members of society.

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, some argue that there are better alternative choices than receive

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sentences

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as education and training. I suppose that

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may be

counter productive

tending to hinder the achievement of a goal

counterproductive

with people who commit

misdemeanors

a crime less serious than a felony

misdemeanours

misdemeanours'

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example, juvenile

delinquents were induced from bad friends participating in criminal activities like shoplifting or drug abuse because of peer pressure. If they have to stay in

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with people who commit serious crimes, it leads to breeding hatred and revenge of people with

misdemeanor

a crime less serious than a felony

misdemeanour

and personality will not improve.

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, education and training are more suitable options for offenders who are young or when the crimes are

misdemeanors

a crime less serious than a felony

misdemeanours

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because

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actions will give them a chance to be productive members of society. In conclusion,

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some people think that offenders should be sent to

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prison which

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prison, which

is the best way, I personally believe that education and training are

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necessary for criminals to not commit crimes again in the future.

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