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Some schools are very strict about their school uniforms and the appearance of their pupils, while other schools have a very relaxed dresscode. What are the advantages and disadvantages of children of having a school uniform?

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Nowadays, a school
uniform
 is one of the disputable questions in the educational system within schools. Some schools have own rules about their uniforms, whilst other schools do not worry about it. What are the benefits of
this
 situation, and what are the drawbacks?
However
, there are both pros and cons to
deciding
Suggestion
decide
 to do
this
. In
this
 essay, I will look at both sides and try to draw some conclusions. One of the major advantages of having own
uniform
 is that pupils will focus more on education. It does not give to them a choice what to wear.
In other words
, they will know that they have to wear a definite
uniform
 every day.
In addition
 to
this
, supply children’s clothes are not cheap for parents, and having
uniform
 will save their money on other expenditures. It can be whether on courses for their children or sport sections it will depend on the child’s interest.
Secondly
, these rules can prevent discrimination between poor and rich children.
That is
 to say, many poor children feel peer pressure due to their appearance. It has a detrimental effect on the child’s mind. They
also
 usually start comparing the commons of parents, which can prompt hated the feelings of children to their parents.
On the other hand
, pupils have to make own decision. Whatever children said they have to be morally prepared to the pressure. Many people claim that most times a school
uniform
 are not as comfortable as dress code.
For example
, Finland schools ban all uniforms within the country, and give the opportunity to children to come at school in what they want to wear. I believe that it helps their children to express opinions, and
teaches
a person whose occupation is teaching
teachers
 to make decisions. All in all, wearing a
uniform
 or relaxed cloth, it depends on school’s rules. Despite the fact that a relaxed
uniform
 more convenient, children need to wear a
uniform
. Personally, I think that peer pressure impact on children destructively.
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