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In some countries, men and women are having children late in life. What are the reasons for this development? Do the advantages of this outweigh its disadvantages?

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It is true that people show a
tendency
 to have children
late
happening at a time subsequent to a reference time
later
 in their
life
 due to some common reasons. While someone believes that
this
 would bring negative consequences, I would argue that
this
tendency
also
 has positive effects.
To begin
 with, there are several relative reasons with regard to financial problems and career problems why people are having
this
tendency
. On the financial perspective, a parent chose to have children later so that they can provide a better quality of
life
 for them. On the career perspective, the women nowadays want to pursue their career and
also
 study higher education.
For example
, if a woman wants to study abroad to get a higher degree, she must spend at least from three to five years to finish it, when in Vietnam, the women
are normally married
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normally marry
 at the age of 25 26.
This
 is
also
 the situation for those who want to focus on their work and want to be promoted and achieve a higher goal in their profession. In my opinion,
this
tendency
 shows both disadvantages and advantages.
Firstly
, the
child
 from a family with a strong and stable financial background will have more chance to be successful in
life
.
Secondly
, the
child
 will have more time to live and share the moments in
life
 with their parents.
However
, a parent, who married and gave birth to a
child
 at a young age, will face
to
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with
 a range of difficulties from making a living to raise their
child
 to teaching their
child
 to be a good person.
Additionally
, women at high age are discouraged from having children in favour of the mothers’ and the children’s health. In conclusion, there are some relative reasons for people to have children
late
happening at a time subsequent to a reference time
later
 in
life
. I believe that
this
 trend
also
 has a great and adverse impact on children.
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