In many places, people’s lifestyles are changing rapidly, and this affects family relationships. Do you think the advantages of such developments outweigh the disadvantages?

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, parallel with the advancement of technology are lifestyle disturbances in some areas.

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does wonders for people at some extent as well as some drawbacks appear. In my

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a mental position from which things are viewed

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, I believe that the advantages and

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the quality of having an inferior or less favorable position

disadvantages

in the development are equal In terms of drawbacks, social network are more popular with a wide range of applications

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as Facebook,

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tiktok

system of signalling by hand signs used by bookmakers at racetracks

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,… People tend to use them to update news and live in their own virtual world.

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lead to the interaction between family members decrease which makes worse relationships.

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, in 4.0 ages technology used in

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, parents work from

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to complete their deadline with annoying by kids. Their solution is giving tablets or smart phones to keep children sit

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lead to some of kids immerse in mobile games and

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consequences appeared.

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, in current society, some of people give their whole mind to

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and neglecting family relationships which due to negative impacts relationships. To illustrate, in families, parents travel a lot on business, do not spend time to talk with their children. They do not understand what children think which lead to

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a generation gap

the generation gap

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, The

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brings positive effects to families. People interact with each other in social network more

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the young generation

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mentality, some parents take

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of social

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networking

as a tool to approach and talk to their kids as a friend which they never done in real life.

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mounts

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mount

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opportunity for parents can understand their children more.

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, the advancement of technology

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the senior. The elder can easily learn how

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tot use

intelligent devices to take a rest when they are bored.

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also imperceptibly build

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also imperceptibly builds

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between the elder and younger generations In conclusion, It is undeniable that the development brings to us endless benefits.

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, some

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rise. …

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Topic Vocabulary:

geographic separation
economic advancement
technological advancements
face-to-face interactions
egalitarian structures
gender roles
traditional roles
work demands
financial stability
access to education
healthcare
cultural shifts
traditions
cultural identity
family heritage

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In many places, people’s lifestyles are changing rapidly, and this affects family relationships. Do you think the advantages of such developments outweigh the disadvantages?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Nowadays longer distances are travelled by people to work and study on a daily basis. Some considered it to be a negative development. While others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some feel that it is impossible for a country to be economically progressive and environmentally friendly at the same time. Others disagree with this view. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.

Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas.

Some people think it's better to choose friends who always have the same opinion as them. Other people believe it's good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that women should be treated as equal to men when applying for a job with police or the military. Others think women are less suitable for this kind of job. Discuss both views and give your opinion.