In many places, people’s lifestyles are changing rapidly, and this affects family relationships. Do you think the advantages of such developments outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowsadays

Suggestion

Nowadays

, parallel with the advancement of technology are lifestyle disturbances in some areas.

This

does wonders for people at some extent as well as some drawbacks appear. In my

viewponits

a mental position from which things are viewed

viewpoint

, I believe that the advantages and

disavantages

the quality of having an inferior or less favorable position

disadvantages

in the development are equal In terms of drawbacks, social network are more popular with a wide range of applications

such

as Facebook,

instagram

tiktok

system of signalling by hand signs used by bookmakers at racetracks

tic-tac

tick-tack

ticktack

,… People tend to use them to update news and live in their own virtual world.

This

lead to the interaction between family members decrease which makes worse relationships.

For instance

, in 4.0 ages technology used in

job

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the job

, parents work from

home want

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home, want

to complete their deadline with annoying by kids. Their solution is giving tablets or smart phones to keep children sit

tight which

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tight, which

lead to some of kids immerse in mobile games and

undersiable

consequences appeared.

In addition

, in current society, some of people give their whole mind to

carreer

the particular occupation for which you are trained

career

clearer

and neglecting family relationships which due to negative impacts relationships. To illustrate, in families, parents travel a lot on business, do not spend time to talk with their children. They do not understand what children think which lead to

generation gap

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a generation gap

the generation gap

However

, The

developmet

act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining

development

also

brings positive effects to families. People interact with each other in social network more

espeacially

to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common

especially

young generation

Suggestion

the young generation

. Grasping

this

mentality, some parents take

advangatge

the quality of having a superior or more favorable position

advantage

of social

network

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networking

as a tool to approach and talk to their kids as a friend which they never done in real life.

This

mounts

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mount

family

effection

a positive feeling of liking

affection

affections

and

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opportunity for parents can understand their children more.

Moreover

, the advancement of technology

contribute

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contributes

hugely in entertainment

espeacially

to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common

especially

the senior. The elder can easily learn how

to tuse

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tot use

intelligent devices to take a rest when they are bored.

This

also imperceptibly build

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also imperceptibly builds

brigde

a structure that allows people or vehicles to cross an obstacle such as a river or canal or railway etc.

bridge

between the elder and younger generations In conclusion, It is undeniable that the development brings to us endless benefits.

However

, some

drawbacks

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drawbacks, also

also

rise. …

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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geographic separation
economic advancement
technological advancements
face-to-face interactions
egalitarian structures
gender roles
traditional roles
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financial stability
access to education
healthcare
cultural shifts
traditions
cultural identity
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In many places, people’s lifestyles are changing rapidly, and this affects family relationships. Do you think the advantages of such developments outweigh the disadvantages?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Because of the negative effects on health of an inactive lifestyle, all university students and school children should be forced to do sports activities at least 3 times per week. Do you agree?

Fewer and fewer people walk on a daily basis. What are the reasons and how to encourage them to spend their time walking?

Schools have a limited amount if money to spend. Some people suggest that it should be spend on good teachers,while others say it should be spent for computers.discuss both the views and give your opinion.

Some people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries, but other people think that it is necessary to travel abroad because all the information can be seen on TV and the Internet. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people argue that governments should not pay money for the international aids when there are some disadvantaged people in their own country, such as the homeless and the unemployed. To what extent do you agree or disagree?