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Animals are in danger of extinction. Some people say that we should protect only those animals, which are useful to humans. Do you agree or disagree?

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Animals are the essential part of eco- system.It is said by some individuals that people should save those animals which are really useful for them. In my perspective
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 all animals are the part of eco-system and we must protect all the fauna and my viewpoints on
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On
 the one hand, some people believe that different countries are making efforts in order to save their endangered species
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For instance
, in India
govermennt
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 is making
wild life
all living things (except people) that are undomesticated
wildlife
sancturaries
a consecrated place where sacred objects are kept
sanctuaries
 in order to guard the endangered species of the country
such
 as tiger because individuals think that these animals are
symbol
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a symbol
symbols
 of pride
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 strength and status of any country and
also
 helps to main eco- system of any country.
On the other hand
, Some people think that it is important to protect only those animals which are used at domestic level for daily needs
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 For example, In
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
 some of the animals are like bulls are used for ploughing the fields and buffalo are used for milk
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So
 they think that people should make efforts to use these animals. To recapitulate,
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 would like to write that all animals are the essential part of eco-system so we should make efforts to save them all.
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