With the development of online communication, people will never be alone and will always be able to make new friends. To what extent do you agree?

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Virtual means of communication have eliminated the distance among individuals, and increased

human’s

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human

socialization quality. People believe that with

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renovation, humanity will always evade isolation and mental illnesses namely depression. In my opinion, I partly agree with the

probabiliy

a measure of how likely it is that some event will occur; a number expressing the ratio of favorable cases to the whole number of cases possible

probability

that

internet

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the internet

provides us in terms of connection and togetherness. Not soon after the invention of the Internet, people have started using

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service worldwide.

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means that users are able to find more well-matched friends regardless of geographical difficulties, socialising anxiety, and racial differences.

Futhermore

in addition

Furthermore

, during COVID-19,

Internet

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the Internet

affords us to text, make calls with friends, and send support to both victims and medical teams around the globe, thereby perishing the feeling of desolation. It is no doubt that

Internet

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the Internet

has brought us

mentally

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mental

positive effects. Despite the wonderful advantage of the Internet, users may be enticed by others into accessing illegal content

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black market

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the black market

and pornography contents. Having more friends does not mean having better friends and the Internet proves it. The more companionships one has, the more difficult it is to control all of them. Some of them may offer drugs, weapons, and even human’s organs. Once a user accepted

such

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offer, he will be violating internet terms of service and their’s country regulation, resulting in imprisonment.

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, they can locate a user’s information through a single message’s IP and sell them online. Many quality

newspaper

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newspapers

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as BBC, New York Times and CNN have posted numerous news about how

danger

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dangerous

it is to surf the internet

unawared

in a forward direction

onwards

. In conclusion,

Internet

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the Internet

is no paradise for anyone. Due to the rising number of users,

online organization

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online, organization

may not keep track

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all of its users, so it is about the awareness of the users. Some seek the Internet to feel less secluded, need even more awareness to prevent

greater feeling

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the greater feeling

of loneliness if not, depression.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

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Relevant & specific examples

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309 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

connectivity
geographical gaps
interact
social media platforms
messaging apps
revolutionized
physical distance
online communities
camaraderie
immediate surroundings
unparalleled opportunities
superficial relationships
excessive reliance
emotional warmth
tactile comfort
digital communication
digital divide
internet censorship
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With the development of online communication, people will never be alone and will always be able to make new friends. To what extent do you agree?

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