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Cycling is more environmentally friendly than other forms of transport. Why is it not popular in many places? And how to increase its popularity?

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It is true that even though bikers are friendlier to the environment, the popularity of bicycle users is not high.
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 of affairs can be attributed to several factors and
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 essay will suggest several viable solutions to remedy the situation. There are two main contributors to the shrinking popularity of bikes. Chief of these is that since cycling is not time efficient, people tend to
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 other means of transportation to save time. While people want to reach their destination as fast as possible, it could take bikers double the amount of time compared to cars and other public transports, so
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 is particularly inconvenient for many people especially the busy ones. Added to
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 is the fact that cycling is not safe because gears equipped are not enough and users are not required to
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 helmets.
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, at night,
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 the darkness would decrease the vision of drivers, the safety of cyclists is undermined due to the small size of bike and
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the shortage
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 To address these problems, they should be,
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 and foremost, brought to the fore.
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 can be done by mounting a global awareness campaign about the
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 of more environmentally-friendly means of transport and celebrities who are trusted by the public can
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 help spread the message.
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, raising the price of fuel and oils would lower the
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 of fuel-based means because if they cannot afford it, they will have to opt for
affordable means
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an affordable means
 of transport likes bikes.
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 is, indeed, not only increasing the number of cycling users, but
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 decreasing fossil fuel consumption
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 benefits the environment.
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