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eople today generall have better lives than people in the past did. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#eople #generall #lives #people
It’s often said that People who live in a modern age today always get a better
life
 conditions than in the past had before
.
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.
 I agree with
this
 view, but there still have some reason to say that the opinion which has been mentioned on
this
 topic is not completely true for all of
situations
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the situations
. At
First
, Talk about the facilities that we have today from school equipments
,
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,
medical theory to modern technology
,
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,
ect
…..
it
Suggestion
It
 is obvious that they’re more convenient than in the past.
For instance
, nowadays if you want to send a letter or to talk with someone who live far away, you just need a click and send an email to them or just make a phone call
.
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.
Moreover there
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Moreover, there
 were many diseases that people in the past did not have the treatment
to
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for
this
,
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,
 but in
this
 high-tech medical
age it
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age, it
 is easy to get a good treatment
to
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for
of
 these diseases
although
 there is some of that right now
also
 do not have the treatment.In addiction,
present-day we
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present-day, we
also
 have many
benefitial
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
 equipment which
support
Suggestion
supports
 for our study stage. In
constrast
the opposition or dissimilarity of things that are compared
contrast
,
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,
because of The improvements of our
life
,
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,
modernizations in many majors like education
,
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,
technology
,
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,
medical,… that leading to the destruction of the environment
on
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of
 the earth.To
contrusct modern
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contrast, modern
contrast modern
construct modern
buildings it’s
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buildings, it’s
 obvious that we have to cut down
tree
Suggestion
a tree
the tree
trees
 to get the materials
,
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,
to exploit many other
minerals which
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minerals, which
 is destructing our natural environment
,
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,
 and that cause the greenhouse effect and the heating of our planet. In conclusion, I believe that nowadays w
e absolu
completely and without qualification; used informally as intensifiers
absolutely
ty have a better
life
 than in th
e past b
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past, but
ut there are some aspects that we have to tack
l
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,
e,improve to make our
life
 more and more effective
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