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In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Everyone works in order to get
handsome amount
Suggestion
a handsome amount
 of
salary
.It is said by some individuals that some of the people who are on higher positions or have extra skills can get
higher
Suggestion
a higher salary
higher salaries
salary
. In my perspective
government
 should not cut the
salary
 of those people who gets
high
Suggestion
a high salary
salary
 because they get
salary
 on the basis of their talent and abilities.
To begin
 with, everyone wants to achieve the goal of earning
excessive amount
Suggestion
an excessive amount
 of
salary
. Some people work really hard to increase their pay
.
Accept space
.
For instance
, a survey was conducted in the year of 2017 in the India and it was mentioned in that a man named Harbans
singh
Suggestion
Singh
 focussed on learning different skills which enhanced his capabilities to earn money and due to
this
 he got
promtion
Suggestion
promoted
promotion
promotions
 and became able to achieve handsome
salary
.
Secondly
, individuals who are on higher positions can get more
salary
 because of their experience and skills because they have the capability of tackle the difficult situation in any organization.
Furthermore
,
government
 should not cut the
salary
 of those who earn
well but
Accept comma addition
well, but
regime
Suggestion
a regime
 should
made
Suggestion
make
sone
quantifier; used with either mass nouns or plural count nouns to indicate an unspecified number or quantity
some
 efforts in order to bring equality and respect in the society.
For example
,
government
 should give them some incentives in order to boost their confidence. To recapitulate,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would like to write that
government
 should not cut the
salary
 of
people but
Accept comma addition
people, but
government
 should find some other ways to boost the confidence of those who get lower
salary
.
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  • social tension
  • economic growth
  • government regulation
  • equitable distribution
  • brain drain
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  • income inequality
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