mitaYoung people are often influenced in their behaviors and situations by others in the same age. This is called “peer pressure”. Do the disadvantages outweigh the advantages?

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Children and teenagers regularly imitate the way other people of their age act in different predicaments, a phenomenon known as " peer pressure ". In my
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a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
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highly disadvantageous. In order to assimilate into society, people need to be trained to act and speak in certain ways.
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"social conditioning" starts from a young age, where kids mimic their parents and siblings.
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is essential for character development and future success in academics and relationships. There are plenty of positive results that it brings
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as good manners, empathy, understanding of justice and learning to give and take respect.
On the other
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hand toxic
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hand, toxic
and unhealthy behaviours are
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passed on in
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way. When someone sees a pattern of interaction repeated continuously
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they assume it is normal.
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, a child may see their friends shout, yell and raise their voices when they're angry.
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is mimicked by that kid, who believes it is acceptable,
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admiteddly
as acknowledged
admittedly
not ideal. Young adults tend to indulge in more extreme forms of
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behaviour. They are well aware of the fact that smoking and doing drugs are
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detrimental
to their health but they do it anyway. Not because they think it's
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ideal, but
because they think it's
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dismissive
dismissal
, as it is so widespread.
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, fitting yourself into a
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a mould
and conforming to social norms is very much emphasized as well. Out of desperation to make friendships and be accepted, young minds sacrifice what makes them unique.
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,
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a boy who enjoys playing with dolls is
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produce laughter
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at by other male classmates. Teenagers will stop playing the flute or writing novels, all just to "fit in".
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, a valuable part of their personality, one that differentiates them from the crowd, and one
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potentially useful is lost in
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way. In conclusion, we need to install more healthy behaviours in Kids along with assuring teenagers that they will be supported by each other, regardless of how different they may be.
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