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People today generally have better lives than people in the past did. To what extent do you agree or disagree.?

#people #lives
Life of humans
have changed
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has changed
 as compared to ancient
time
 due to westernization, globalization and urbanization.In my perspective, people are spending better life these days as compared to
ancient
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an ancient time
ancient times
time
 and my viewpoints on
this
issues
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issue
 will be elaborated in the aforementioned paragraphs.
To begin
 with, these days due to the advancement of technology people use computers, laptops, mobile phones which has changed the communication process of the people because in previous
time
 there were fewer method of interacting with people and they were unable to contact each other because of limited transportation sources and communication methods.
For instance
, during old
time
 pigeons were sent from one place to another in order to convey their
message but
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message, but
 in
this
 modern era individuals
use
to the same degree (often followed by 'as')
as
 mobile phones, computers through which they can
do
engage in
make
 video calls and send voice messages.
Furthermore
, during previous
time
 there were limited sources of collecting
knowledge but these
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knowledge, but these
 days people are using
internet
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the internet
 and various other books which are the fastest way of acquiring any kind of knowledge and information
.
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.
Another difference is that during old
time
 there were less educational institute and people were not
literate but
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literate, but
 these days there are so many educational
institute
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institutes
.
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.
 To recapitulate, I would like to write that people are enjoy
ing better
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a better life
better lives
life as compared to old
time
 because of the availability of facilities new facilities
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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