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University students are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studies. Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages?

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These days it has become truly available and common to study abroad so bigger numbers of
students
 every day start their path to overseas alma maters. The main motivation to study abroad - get rid of
parents'
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 rules and dip into life’s wild terra incognita
although
this
 leads from the other side to being completely alone
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and experience
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experience
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experiencing
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 in foreign culture and language environment. In my opinion, the intention to receive a diploma from the best universities covers the side effects of living far from home.
Experience
 in living by themselves, completely separate from family leads
students
 to
mastering
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 self-manage skills and grow personally
while
this
 is hardly achievable in homelands. If young people are not forced to come out of their comfort zone and still rely on usual support
then
 they are not going through real
experience
.
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, studying in
home
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their home
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 city
students
 can keep living in their parents' houses, use all the house infrastructure and even use their family car to go to university daily.
This
 priceless real-life early practice provides youths with a good
start
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 point for their own path.
The
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 same time living by yourself leads
students
 to decreased availability of close relations. One moment you can find yourself feeling too small against the big world with all the problems and without support.
This
 may happen if some kind of hard situation arises in which normally you’re looking for support from parents or old friends' side with good advice. So managing your life on your own requires some strong will and courage to succeed. With open-world
experience
 nowadays a lot of young people are attempting to get a better education
if
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in
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 foreign countries.
This
 way they have all the possibilities for success but
also
 great self-responsibility. For my taste, it’s a great opportunity and if you have
such
 a chance
then
 use it without additional thoughts.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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