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Demand for food is increasing worldwide. What is the cause of this? What measures can the international community take to meet this demand?

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Food
 is the basic necessity of life. These days
demand
 for
food
 is increasing
day
 by
day
 and there are numerous reasons behind
this
. I will elaborate causes and measures which can be elaborated in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, the main cause of increased
demand
 for
food
 is overpopulation
.
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.
Population is increasing
day
 by
day
 in developed and developing countries
this
 is the main reason that
demand
 for
food
 has risen in each country
.
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.
For instance
,
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,
 a survey was conducted in the year of 2017 in all the countries and its result was that
demand
 for
food
 has risen 50 percent in some of the developed countries as compared to
past
Suggestion
the past
. Another cause is that in
this
 modernized and westernized
world people
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world, people
 are becoming health conscious so their
demand
 for
food
 has increased.
On the other hand
, there are some solutions of these problems. International communities should start
public distribution system
Suggestion
the public distribution system
a public distribution system
 in which
food
 should be distributed on
low rate
Suggestion
a low rate
 to poor people so that they can meet the demands for
food
. Another
solutions
Suggestion
solution
 is that
government
Suggestion
the government
 should make some efforts to reduce the problem of overpopulation. Poor people should be guided about family planning so that there should be control of
population
Suggestion
the population
.There is one other solution in which farmers should be encouraged to produce crops like wheat, rice and maize by providing them subsidies and loans. To recapitulate
,
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,
 I would like to write that
demand
 for
food
 has risen
globally but
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globally, but
 it is the joint duty of government and communities to solve
this
 problem.
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