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Nations should spend more money on skills and vocational training for practical work, rather than on university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Read my sample answer for this question

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Skills are required in order to achieve
success
 in
life
. It is said by some individuals that all the countries should focus on additional courses and development of skills rather than only paying attention on university education. I agree with the statement and my viewpoints on
this
 topic will be elaborated in the aforementioned paragraphs.
To begin
 with, colleges and universities should give more importance to practical courses and students should be given training on various sports like cricket, classical and folk music in universities and colleges so that students can these areas as
profession
Suggestion
a profession
 in their
life
. Apart from
this
, some of the skills like problem solving ability, cooperation, patience should be taught to students at universities and colleges. There are several benefits of acquiring these qualities at universities and schools
.
Accept space
.
First advantage
Suggestion
The first advantage
 is that
youngsters chances
Suggestion
the youngsters' chances
youngsters' chances
 of
success
 will rise in future because they will be achieve
success
 in
short time period
Suggestion
a short time period
 because they know the ways to target
success
 in their
life
.
For instance
, In Indian educational institute only theoretical knowledge is imparted and less practical knowledge is imparted in universities and
this
 is the reason that in India more people are unemployed and those who are doing jobs are not working in their field. To recapitulate, I would like to write that all the universities must pay attention towards developing the skills which are really essential in order to get
job
Suggestion
a job
the job
 and achieve
success
 in
life
.
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